October 10, 2007

October 10, 2007
Today students went into the computer writing lab to type up their three poems.
Here are the rubrics:

1. An inspired-by poem, typed, or if a concrete poem, it may be neatly “drawn” in ink on plain (not lined) paper.
2. An “If I Were In Charge of the World” Poem, typed
3. An “I Am From” Poem, typed
These poems are due, typed, by October 23. What was not finished in the computer lab must be finished on your own.

Rubric for Typed Poem – “Inspired By” Poem
Score 5 Score 4 Score 3
Ideas/Details 5 = The poem is intriguing and/or entertaining. It has successfully expressed a new, different idea using the format of the poem that inspired it. 4= The poem is interesting and expresses a new idea. 3= The new poem expresses an idea which is the same as or too close to that of the original model, making a few changes.
Conventions 5 = The poem carefully follows the required format of this type of poem 4= There are one or two problems with following the format. 3= There are several problems with following the format.
Presentation 5= It’s ready to post for the public. 4= One problem must be fixed before posting. 3= More than one problem must be fixed before posting.

These are the poems that are inspired by and use the same format as the famous poems from Love That Dog.


Rubric for Typed Poem – “If I Were In Charge of the World” Poem
Score 5 Score 4 Score 3
Ideas/Details 5= The poem is entertaining and/or thought-provoking. The poet has used many specific details/images. 4= The poem is interesting.
There some specific details/images. 3= The poem may be somewhat interesting, but it lacks specific details/images.
Conventions 5= The poem carefully follows the required format of this type of poem 4= There are one or two problems with following the format. 3= There are several problems with following the format.
Presentation 5= It’s ready to post for the public. 4= One problem must be fixed before posting. 3= More than one problem must be fixed before posting.

Example of an "If I Were in Charge Poem":
IF I WERE IN CHARGE OF THE WORLD

If I were in charge of the world
I’d cancel oatmeal,
Monday mornings,
Allergy shots, and also
Sara Steinberg.

If I were in charge of the world
There’d be brighter night lights,
Healthier hamsters, and
Basketball baskets forty-eight inches lower.

If I were in charge of the world
You wouldn’t have lonely.
You wouldn’t have clean.
You wouldn’t have bedtimes.
Or “Don’t punch your sister.”
You wouldn’t even have sisters.

If I were in charge of the world
A chocolate sundae with whipped cream and nuts
would be a vegetable.
All 007 movies would be G.
And a person who sometimes forget to brush,
And sometimes forget to flush,
Would still be allowed to be
In charge of the world.

Format for an "If I Were In Charge of the World" poem:

IF I WERE IN CHARGE OF THE WORLD

If I were in charge of the world
I’d cancel ____________________________________,
_____________________________________________,
_____________________________________________, and also
_____________________________________________.

If I were in charge of the world
There’d be _______________________________________,
_____________________________________________, and
________________________________________________.

If I were in charge of the world
You wouldn’t have ___________________________________.
You wouldn’t have ___________________________________.
You wouldn’t have ___________________________________.
Or ________________________________________________.
You wouldn’t even have ________________________________.

If I were in charge of the world
__________________________________________________________
would be _____________________________________________.
All ___________________________ would be __________________________.
And a person who _________________________________________________,
And _____________________________________________________________,
Would still be allowed to be
In charge of the world.




Rubric for Typed Poem – “I Am From” Poem
Score 6 Score 5 Score 4
Ideas/Details 6= The poem is intriguing. It is full of memorable sensory images. 5= The poem is interesting. There are some memorable images. 4= Poem is somewhat interesting, but it lacks sensory images.
Word choice 6= The poet carefully selected the most vivid and exact words. No dead words here! 5= There are a few vivid and exact words. 4= The poet needs to spend more time looking at word choice, finding exact, vivid words.
Conventions 6= The poet has carefully followed the required format of this type of poem 5= There are one or two problems with following the format. 4= There are several problems with following the format.
Presentation 6= It’s ready to post for the public. 5= One problem must be fixed before posting. 4= More than one problem must be fixed before posting.

Example of an I Am From Poem:

I am from
Hamburger pie and whole wheat bread
Grandma's ladybug tree
Pumpkin carving contests and
The high school turkey toss.

I am from
Spiders and "The Hook" in the cellar
Dark Valley and Pleasant Creek
Gophers we trap for two bits each and
My cousin Gary who burps in my ear.

I am
Apple juice from the gas station at Schofield
Elk jerky from Springfield Meats
Buttery popcorn on rainy Saturdays and
Long dirt roads that take me home.
by Bubba Boyd

Pattern:

I am from
[four lines]

I am from
[four lines]

I am
[four lines]